Hi lily D,
What I liked about your comment is that it told the public stuff that can be shared not the private good job. Feedback is try to not put so much full stops in your writing it makes it a bit boring. What workshop you could go to is complex sentences with Mrs Ruffell. I have a little connection it is that I have a pet cat as well but not as much as yours! A questions is that what is your favourite magic trick so far. Otherwise amazing work! Keep it up!

Hi lily,
Your post is really good because you don't just say what you like how old you are and all the basics you tell us your pets names and
What they like to do. Maybe next time you could proofread a little more because There was a part where it said I also try magic I learn . Other than that I Really liked it.
From Mia Rose