Why children learn to swim - By Ana
16.5.2016 Plan
Why children learn to swim
In New Zealand we are surrounded with a lot of water, so that means kids need to learn how to swim.I'm going to tell you three reasons based on why kids learn to swim.
The first reason on why kids learn to swim is they might drown.When you are near water you might accidentally fall in the deep blue see,example you could be on a boat fishing and you are near big rocks and your boat might crash into the big rocks and you could hurt your self really bad.
The second reason why kids learn to swim is you might want to become a Olympics swimmer.Maybe you are passionate about swimming,example you could become a professional swimmer,swimming coach and a lifeguard.
The last reason why kids learn to swim It is good for you, It is fun, keeps you fit and it's healthy.Example When it's a hot day you can go swimming at the beach and have fun and you won't get so bored at home.
Children learn to swim for different reasons, because you might drown, you might get a job in swimming and because it's good for you.
Ki Ora Ana!
ReplyDeleteThat's one amazing explanation about why Children need to learn to swim. I also agree that New Zealand has lots of water, and so it can be dangerous! My only feed forward for you to be is check where you have added your paragraphs. For example, the first and second reason were in the same paragraph, and they should be two separate paragraphs. Also, after punctuation, like a comma, make sure you add a space.
Keep it up,
Bella! :D
Thanks for the feedback/feed forward it was really positive and helpful,Thanks, I will try to do that in the next writing and see if that makes it better.
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